Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright - Jan Wayne Fields
What do you see?
I see giraffes running.
There are no giraffes, my love. Only metal giants clouding the horizon.
What do you hear?
I hear whales waltzing in the deep.
There are no whales, darling. Only metal shadows dancing their deadly minuet.
What do you dream?
I dream of you and me…sailing away.
There is no you and me…Only monsters left to roam the earth.
What do you want?
For you to hold me…and find the courage to let me go.
There is no you…there is only an ocean of sadness and I barely dare to stand on its shores.
What a gorgeously written, melancholy piece. A real feeling of longing, of being out of step with each other and the world. We all write such different stories based on the same photograph – it never ceases to delight me 🙂
Wow… I stumbled upon your site and this is the first thing I read accompanied by the music by Philip Glass. My favourite companion in dark hours. It resonates big time. Beautifully written…
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
How beautiful, how sad. What sumptuous wordcraft
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What a nice thing to say! Thank you so much.
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Dear Loré,
Such a sad piece. Well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you.
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Wonderful, Loré. Just wonderful. A sad and heartfelt piece.
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Thank you for your lovely words and for your constant support. Much appreciated.
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Phew.
Poetic and perfect.
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Oh, that is so nice of you to say.
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Very beautiful, and goes so perfectly with this piece of music. There’s something cinematic about the writing.
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I always imagine the scene as it would play out on a screen. Hence the music to my stories. Thank you, Claire.
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Painfully beautiful. Wow.
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Thank you.
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Love’d reading this. Mike
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Glad you liked it, Mike. Tnx.
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I so loved the structure of this and the flow as well. Good one.
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Thank you so much!
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I do love the change of perspective, of mutual denials in this dialogue… so well crafted..
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What is left for a writer but to play…Thank you, Bjorn.
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This is very well written, it almost reads like a dialogue between a hypnotist and his unfortunate victim.
Brilliant.
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Sorry that should be it reads not almost reads.
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Thank you so much.
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What a gorgeously written, melancholy piece. A real feeling of longing, of being out of step with each other and the world. We all write such different stories based on the same photograph – it never ceases to delight me 🙂
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I agree, it is fascinating to look at the world through so many different points of view. Thank you.
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My pleasure 🙂
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Beautifully written, but very sad.
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Glad you liked it, thank you.
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Deep and feeling!
Beautiful!
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Much appreciated.
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Quite different personalities. Very poetic, lovely yet sad.
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As always, thank you.
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Very interesting. Very sad, too. Well done.
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Thank you.
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Gee, that was depressing. I’m left feeling hopeless.
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Time for another drinking game …
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Don’t…there is always a ray of hope. 🙂
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I like giraffes, but this wasn’t my day.
Seriously, though, a swell written piece, Loré.
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Thank you!
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Well done, as I wipe a single tear away.
Tracey
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Oh, that is so sweet of you.
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So much pathos and at the same time beauty.
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Thank you for those kind words.
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Poignant and evocative – the disembodied voices build a feeling of loss and longing and hopelessness. Beautifully done.
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Thank you so much, Margaret. Kind as ever.
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beautifully crafted heartbreak 🙂
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Much appreciated.
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Very thoughtful; you’ve certainly got me thinking.
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Thank you, Dawn.
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Lovely. I enjoyed it very much – well written.
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Thank you, Emily.
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Sad poetic piece but also beautiful, Lore. —- Suzanne
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Thank you, Suzanne.
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Wow… I stumbled upon your site and this is the first thing I read accompanied by the music by Philip Glass. My favourite companion in dark hours. It resonates big time. Beautifully written…
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I am so glad you stumbled upon my blog and this story in particular. Glad it worked for you.
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