Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Madison Woods
Harry’s limp body was sprawled in the back alley, blood stain on his shirt blossoming under the street light.
“You fucked me up real bad.”
She stood over him, inhaling the night air inwrought with the scent of death.
“I would never thought old Carfano would send his own daughter after me. Was any of it real….or just another job?”
The second bullet entered his brain, extinguishing the light in his eyes, freezing the questioning smile on his lips.
Like moths to the flame, they were drawn to her. Walking away, she flexed her shaking hand. Just another job.
Makes me think immediately of “The Sting” i.e. the female hitman (woman) who was given to job of killing Robert Redford – but only after they’d shacked up for the night. Very visual. Cheers!
That a woman is a killer always makes me doubly sad. I remember my Mum telling me when she was growing up on a farm, women would not slaughter chickens because they were considered to to be life-givers, not life-takers. But your story is wonderfully told.
I love the music, it fits perfectly. Great story with so much there, but not said. I also noticed the shaking hand, and that she was the (probably) boss’s daughter. Doing her work, I guess, no matter what.
Dear Loré,
A beautiful woman with no soul–deadly. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle.
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A chilling tale.. why do we always think that beauty is the same as being a good person?
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Glad to have you back!
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I love that she didn’t answer his question. It feels like a subversion of typical, unrealistic death scenes with lots of exposition.
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Thank you.
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Nicely done. She’s a cold one that one.
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Thank you, Sandra.
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Nice slant on the prompt. Gritty is good!
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Glad you liked it.
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Hard hitting noir here. Great. Liked the shaking hand – leaves me wondering. And excellent choice of video.
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Good catch on the shaking hand. Thank you. 🙂
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Makes me think immediately of “The Sting” i.e. the female hitman (woman) who was given to job of killing Robert Redford – but only after they’d shacked up for the night. Very visual. Cheers!
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An extra Brownie Point for the London Grammar video. Love that girl’s voice.
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Tnx!
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There is a fatal attraction in dangerous people, male or female. Well done.
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Much appreciated, thank you.
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Chilling story. Nicely done.
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Thank you.
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Wow…the music that you added to this put the work in a whole new dimension. The story really fits it. Nice work.
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Thank you. I don’t know why I started adding the music to my stories, but now I just can’t stop.
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Keep it up, and I’ll add ya to my blogroll! 😀
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Yeeks, I bet she makes quite the assassin.
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Yes, she does. 🙂
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You’ve smashed a few paradigms here.
Well done
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Equal rights and opportunities… Thank you.
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Excellent piece of Noir.
But this time she is fooling no one, is she?
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Yeah, I think not, Thank you!
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That a woman is a killer always makes me doubly sad. I remember my Mum telling me when she was growing up on a farm, women would not slaughter chickens because they were considered to to be life-givers, not life-takers. But your story is wonderfully told.
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That is an interesting story, thank you!
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I love the music, it fits perfectly. Great story with so much there, but not said. I also noticed the shaking hand, and that she was the (probably) boss’s daughter. Doing her work, I guess, no matter what.
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So glad you liked the music, I love adding to the story.
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Excellent! The world is creating more and more deadly beauties. Soon we will rule the world, okay, so I can dream! Well done!
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Haha, love your comment!
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Very different take on the prompt. Loved it
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Thank you so much.
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You went somewhere unexpected. Nice work.
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Glad you liked my unexpected ways, thank you!
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A killer dressed in a lady’s garb. Frightening.
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Thank you.
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Is that ever the basis for a great film noir?! I can see Barbara Stanwyk. Inventive use of the prompt, all right.
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That I like!
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That shaking hand leaves me wondering whether maybe it was real and she’s just trying to persuade herself otherwise… Good story. 🙂
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It just may be, good catch. Thank you.
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