Sleight Of Hand

Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….

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 Copyright – The Reclining Gentleman

I don’t know what went wrong, my dear.
I remember you standing there in a pale yellow dress, waiting patiently while I presented my greatest trick to the audience. As you vanished in a cloud of smoke, the last thing I saw was you blowing me the kiss. And then the time for The Prestige* came, but you were gone.
I can forgive you ruining my career…but did you have to break my heart?
These days the birds are the only companions to my jaded soul. How sad that the applause is replaced with the flapping of the wings…

*Each magician’s trick has three parts; The Pledge, where the audience is presented with an ordinary object; The Turn, where the object is turned into something extraordinary; and The Prestige, where the object is brought back.

Inspiration is a dangerous beast, lurking from the shadows, waiting a perfect moment to jump on your back and drag you into unknown. It dragged me far away this week and I barely managed to tie it back by a bird’s feather.

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42 thoughts on “Sleight Of Hand

  1. Dear Lore,

    Did you mean ‘career’ instead of carrier? If so, feel free to edit this comment after you edit your story.

    I thought this a very good take on the prompt. Loved the use of The Prestige and completely lost myself in your magic.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • I am so glad you liked it, I wrote a magician’s story tied to that island in the middle of the lake, didn’t like it, started again and completely forgot about the photo. 🙂
      Thank you for your lovely words and especially for that correction.

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  2. Lore, so many types of magic in your story and such heartbreak. I agree with Paul about the breaks. If you just put in an empty line at the end of each section, I think it would read better as the pauses and breaks would be built in.

    janet

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    • Oh my, I already changed it after I read Paul’s comment. 😀 It was just one long paragraph, have no idea why. If I add empty lines, I am afraid someone will comment that I need to add chapter titles. 😛 Just kidding, I appreciate constructive criticism.

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  3. I like the details about the yellow dress and the kiss. They make her seem so very real and present, and then poof! she’s not. Great trick. Lovely alluring story.
    Marg

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  4. Lore,
    I appreciate your reference to the prestige. The movie by that name is a guilty pleasure of mine and one of my all-time favorites. Your story provides a unique spin on both the prompt and the tricks of a magician–who, this time, is tricked by another. Well done.

    Marie Gail

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    • I stumbled upon that info while reading about the movie The Prestige, always happy to learn something new. Applause replaced by flapping wings – that part turned out pretty good. 🙂 I am overwhelmed by the amount of positive feedback. Thank you.

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