Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Ceayr
Is there anything trickier than the very nature of water?
The cool sip from a tall glass on the hot summer day that quenches the thirst…or the suffocating feeling while waterboarded in a cold prison cell.
Gentle warming touch under the shower after the afternoon of making love…or the stiffness of the wet clothes while seeking shelter under the bridge.
Laughing when a friend pulls you under water on your summer vacation…or fighting the waves of panic while floating in a dingy on a stormy sea.
When the walls come down, don’t mistake my tears for the rain.
Very sinister. I am afraid the line, ‘the suffocating feeling while waterboarded in a cold prison cell’, went right over my head. What does that mean? I will have to google it.
I found this fascinating because all your descriptions were tactile; you didn’t invoke the other senses at all. And I guess that’s very appropriate for the end of a love affair.
Such vivid and stark contrasts. I had to read each twice to savour them.
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Than you for that.
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A lovely oscillation and a killer last line
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I always go for the jugular. 🙂 Tnx, Neil.
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Very sinister. I am afraid the line, ‘the suffocating feeling while waterboarded in a cold prison cell’, went right over my head. What does that mean? I will have to google it.
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Whoa.. I had never heard of such a method of torture. I almost wish I still hadn’t….
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Sorry if it caused you some discomfort. Unfortunately, it is the world we live in.
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Dear Loré,
The contrasts in this are brilliant. And the last line is a sucker punch.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Much appreciated, Rochelle.
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Water is inspirational, for better or worse.
Love this.
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Thank you. And thank you for the photo.
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Some cry in the rain to hide their tears. Now this is one genuine person who doesn’t shy away 🙂
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Well, no point in hiding when the walls crumble down.
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Love the contrasts. It is such a powerful element of nature.
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Thank you, Iain.
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I love how you gave us so many contrasts. That ending was the clincher. Beautifully done, Loré.
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Thank you so much!
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I found this fascinating because all your descriptions were tactile; you didn’t invoke the other senses at all. And I guess that’s very appropriate for the end of a love affair.
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Oh, you are very kind.
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beautiful. Thank you.
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Much appreciated, thank you.
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Classic contrast and comparison, from beginning to ending. Very well done.
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As always, thank you for stopping by.
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WoW!
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Oh, you make me blush. Thank you.
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Poetic ending. Water is part of who we are, in all of its forms. You’ve woven its wonder well.
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I like this piece a lot. Very thoughtful and full of meaning. Much to ponder…
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Powerful!
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water is very malleable. it can make or break you. handle it with caution.
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Water is a fascinating element; live giver and death bringer. Great thoughtful piece!
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A thought-provoking piece indeed. Some like water with their whiskey – I think it spoils It!
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You create lots of tensions, good vs evil, push and pull. Provocative.
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Thought-provoking, full of such contrasts!
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Tantalising writing with a good ending
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So many contrasts with water. So necessary, beautiful, soothing; so dangerous and discomforting. Cool.
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Beautiful writing, worth several reads, well done
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Well penned.
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Wow! I loved every word. Contrast at its best…..
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