Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Some hearts are like overstuffed closets, with doors wide open. Emotions falling off the shelves, memories tangled like dozen colorful scarfs, with no room to breathe.
Other hearts are like empty corridors, filled with echoes of hopes and disappointments bouncing off the closed doors.
You imagine your heart is like the most beautiful library, well-organized, overflowing with books filled with laughter and tears, joy and despair, memories and dreams…and you think you have it all in impeccable order.
You think you can turn the key and walk away.
But then you hear the knock on the door…from the inside.
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
I loved the metaphor and the knock
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Thank you, Neil.
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That’s a nice little hook there at the end. Well done.
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Glad you liked it.
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Sometimes you can create your own internal edifices, and sometimes you have to deconstruct them. Lovely!
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Most importantly, don’t neglect that knock from the inside. 🙂
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Nice metaphorical take, and the last line is very well done.
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Much appreciated.
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Dear Loré,
Beautifully constructed metaphor. The knock from the inside left me breathless. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much, Rochelle.
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That was just a lovely metaphor until the knock on the door…then it became really thought-provoking! Well done, Lore.
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Glad you liked it, thank you!
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Beautifully crafted metaphor, almost poetic. Nice twist at the end.
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What would be the story without the twist at the end? 🙂 Thank you.
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So beautifully penned!
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Thank you!
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Love the contrast of the lyrical, set against the dark twist at the end.
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Somehow I end up writing most of my stories like poems.
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Those are the best kind. 🙂 Fiction is the poetry that makes sense of life, or so I’ve heard. You brought them together wonderfully.
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So beautifully written. I love the idea of our hearts as rooms, this really got to me.
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That makes me smile, thank you.
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Oh, I loved this! Fabulous last line too.
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Thank you, Susan.
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I know the knock from the inside metaphorical, but I immediately thought of a ghost story.
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I have no problem with ghosts! 😀
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Now you’ve got me thinking about my ticker! I wonder what’s in there? Nice one Lore.
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I wonder who is trapped in there, Keith. 😉
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From the inside? Wow! I love the idea of the heart as a closet.
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Thank you, Liz.
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So beautifully written.
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Much appreciated.
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I am jealous, loved your take on this weeks prompt.
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Oh, that is too kind!
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That was fabulous, Loré. Yes, so lyrical and poetic then…. what?
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Then you hit the ground. 😀 Thank you for that fabulous compliment.
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Certainly an unexpected ending… My heart is a messy closet.
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Very thought-provoking with a great last line.
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Glad you liked it, thank you!
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I like the idea that hearts have memories, just like muscles do, muscle memory that is. Heart memory. Cool.
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Glad you liked it.
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The door is the most important part of a closet… and it needs to be opened
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And sometimes you need to close it, just for a while.
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Oh my, I’m still lost in your words .. beautifully written
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Thank you, Julie.
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So lyrical and lovely, with such a twist at the end!
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Much appreciated.
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Chilling and I really liked the change of tone at the end!
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Thank you.
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Beautifully done. It pulls at the heartstrings this one.
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When I was a little girl, I dreamed of playing harp.
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Great title (too)!
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Thank you!
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So all was not so perfect. Great ending twist, Lore` 🙂 — Suzanne
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I don’t believe in perfection. Thank you, Suzanne.
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