Forfeit

Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….

 Copyright –   J Hardy Carroll

The fire is gone. I see it now.
In the way you notice silver in my hair…
Or how your eyes glide over my weathered body…

“Fourteen years is not much of a difference” your eyes smiled back then. I smiled back at your youthfulness and let you play with my heart. I wonder if slow burn with someone closer to my age would hurt less than this wild fire we had.

You say you love me and I know you believe it…
But I see the truth in your eyes…
I lost before it ever started.

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65 thoughts on “Forfeit

  1. You’ve written a poignant and beautiful story – I absolutely love it. You evoke both the flaws of now, and the wonder of then so that we can mourn with the narrator the passing of time, and exult with her in the joy she has experienced. Delightful, clever, sensitive writing!

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  2. Dale says:

    So nice to have you back, Loré.. and with a most beautiful piece of writing.
    I do know it can happen successfully though I fear most end up like your sweet woman…

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  3. “I lost before it even started” is such a lovely line and I’ve never thought about it – but you are absolutely so astute and shrewd when it comes to explaining a failed romance. Really, I am impressed!

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