Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
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Like a dancer on a music box, she seemed to move only when someone would wind up her key. The expected smiles became more elusive and the sticky cobweb spread through her body, slowing her heartbeat.
Red light cast strange shadows on her face, making her fake lashes even longer, hiding her eyes from strangers.
She wondered when it became easier to display her naked body, then to show them her face…when it became more bearable to give them entrance to her body, but deny them her lips.
The shame becomes acceptance, intimacy gets a different definition. She hides her Self well, but I don’t think she lost it yet. Great emotional writing.
Powerful portrait. She’s trapped it seems, and I sense the she’s closing herself down inside a cage of her own making. Lots to think about in your story.
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
Super take on the prompt, Loré! Video goes great with the story, too. Beautiful vocals!
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Thank you! I simply adore that song.
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Very graphic, very emotive.
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Seems that is my forte. 🙂 Dancing on the edge.
Thank you, Sandra!
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Words and music in perfect harmony. I thought about using the key, but I couldn’t get it to fit!
My 100 words!
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Funny how I zoomed on that from the start. That’s why I love FFs, so many different stories. Thank you!
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I seem to repeat myself every week with you but brilliant. Beautifully written as always
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And I appreciate each and every kind word you send my way. 🙂
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Powerful stuff, very well written.
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Thank you, glad you liked it.
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God! That’s good!
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Thank you. 🙂
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I really like the way she hides herself with those lashes… Eyes and lips still too intimate… I think you have capture the red light emotions.
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We are mostly full of judgment and prejudice, I tried to give her a voice. Thank you!
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Wow. Another big story beautifully written!
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Much appreciated, thank you!
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Brilliant story!
Sad fate to wake up to everyday.
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Unfortunately, sometimes it is easier to move in circles than to try and break free.
Thank you.
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Great description of a desperate life..
Very well done.
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You are very kind, thank you!
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Great story. Very tragic, the loss of one’s self.
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Indeed. Thank you so much.
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Very effective use of the prompt and an intriguing character study.
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Thank you, Perry!
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What a sad a desperate tale. Nicely done. 🙂
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Much appreaciated.
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The harshness and reality of some people’s lives!
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Indeed, too common.
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Tragic story you really got inside her and showed emotions brilliantly. Funny, but I didn’t see the key at all until reading this.
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That’s the beauty of so many different stories and different approaches. Thank you.
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The shame becomes acceptance, intimacy gets a different definition. She hides her Self well, but I don’t think she lost it yet. Great emotional writing.
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Thank you so much!
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I’m glad you used the shadow of the wind-up key. I was hoping someone would. Great character study and insight to her thoughts and emotions.
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Glad you liked it, much appreciated.
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Such a heartbreaking story, but sadly is a reality for some.
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Yes, unfortunately. Thank you for stopping by.
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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Truly heartbreaking, vividly told with great insight and empathy.
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Thank you for lovely words.
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Yikes
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Indeed.
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Powerful portrait. She’s trapped it seems, and I sense the she’s closing herself down inside a cage of her own making. Lots to think about in your story.
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Thank you, Margaret. Most of the time, we are our worst enemies.
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Such a powerful and moving character vignette. The intimacy of lips is something that’s very real. Beautifully done!
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Thank you so much!
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Excellent description of a woman losing herself. Thanks for the lovely song..Well written, Lore. —- Suzanne
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Your words are always much appreciated, Suzanne.
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