Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – J Hardy Carroll
With every sunrise it got harder to remember the exact moment she gave up. Days rolled one after the other, placing another layer of dust on her dreams.
It was no surprise she was not allowed to his funeral. Never welcomed into their ranks, hated from the start for dragging their beloved son through the mud, his family made it clear they were not to mix.
Watching from the window as they carried his casket from the train to the hearse, the fog over her soul lifted.
“We’ll be ok.” She whispered to the baby safely nested in her belly.
Loré, it’s so good to be reading your work again! I apologize for my vanishing acts, of late. There is such a permeable sense of sadness throughout this piece. The first paragraph (2 lines) are just gorgeous; I read them several times, for their simple beauty. Love this piece!
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
Dear Loré,
So much said in so few words. Well layered and well told. The last line is something of a sucker punch. Good job.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Glad you liked it, Rochelle!!!
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Hope existed in the Pandora box and shouted to be let out. Awesome!
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Thank you so much!
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Beautifully done, every word seemed to have been carefully chosen. Well done.
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As always, you are so kind. Thank you, Sandra!
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Somehow I love a story of a stronger Juliet who manage to find a new strength to go on. You have used the words so very well.
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Thank you, Björn. I hope there are more heroines than princesses in the world.
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Ooooh, brilliantly done, Loré!
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Thank you so much, Stacy!!!
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Sorry for mine – I’ve been in the same boat, Loré!
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Fabulous.
A world in 100 words.
Love it.
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Much appreciated!!!
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I love this story.
It provokes a lot of thoughts.
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That is so nice to hear!
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No worries!
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Oooh, loved the ending. She now has much more of him than they do. Nice.
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Couldn’t agree more!
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Love all the layers to this.
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As always, thank you for your kind words. 🙂
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beautifully crafted 🙂
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Thank you, Helen.
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Wow. Poignant and very sad. Sweet job, Loré.
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Thank you!
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No problem. 😉
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She has a hope his family doesn’t have. I like the way her view changes and the fog lifts from her life.
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In the end, she got the most out of all of them.
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So sad, but with a little beacon of hope right at the end. I loved the line “placing another layer of dust on her dreams”. Great stuff!
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I always like when readers pick their favorite lines. Thank you!
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Loré, it’s so good to be reading your work again! I apologize for my vanishing acts, of late. There is such a permeable sense of sadness throughout this piece. The first paragraph (2 lines) are just gorgeous; I read them several times, for their simple beauty. Love this piece!
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Dawn, it is always nice to read your words, wether on your blog or in comments. Thank you for your lovely words!
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That was great. Very poignant and well told
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Thank you!
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Beautifully done, Loré. She has a piece of him which she should guard with her everything!
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And I am sure she will! Thank you, Dale.
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This is beautiful.
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Thank you, Dawn.
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Busy busy busy! ;0
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A heartrending story but ending in hope. Lovely descriptions, Lore. We feel her pain and hope. Well done. —- Suzanne
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What is left when all else fail, but a ray of hope. Thank you, Suzanne.
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