Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Roger Bultot
Copyright – Roger Bultot
Now that’s a pretty remake of the ugly duckling story. I liked it, especially the added social commentary that we need to start thinking now about the rights of conscious machines in the future
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I love when the reader sees more than I first intended to put into the story. Thank you!
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Dear Loré,
Imaginative story that illustrates how cruel people can be to those they don’t understand. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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My imagination is one thing I can always rely on. Thank you, Rochelle.
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There’s a spin I didn’t expect. The point remains the same- though sometimes I feel cruelty is learned..who knows now.
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I love the first look at the photo, leaping into unknown. Always end up somewhere interesting. Thank you.
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This was beautiful! It was poetic in a sense as well. I loved the symbolism, turning her legs to wings.
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Thank you, very kind words.
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A really exciting spin – love the way she makes her own wings out of herself, moving on to new things. Great, succinct use of language
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Happy you liked it, thank you so much.
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My pleasure 🙂
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Hope she had really transformed, and so could fly. Like Mike
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Oh, I think there is a bright future ahead.
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Lovely story. People can be so cruel, but she found her freedom.
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I think we are our best saviors. Thank you!
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Nice story, it makes you really feel for her and embarrassed for society
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Cruelty accompanies us at every step.
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Androids do dream of electric sheep. Wonderful imagination
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One of my all time favorites. Tnx, Bjorn!
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What a beautiful story! And there’s so much depth in it, so much back-story that’s just hinted at. I love this deeply sad, but beautifully written sentence:
“Unfazed, she just stood there, a sad mixture of metal and blood.”
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I am so happy you liked it! Much appreciated.
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Most welcome! 🙂
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“sad mixture of metal and blood” is a compelling line. Nicely done.
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Thank you, Sandra.
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I have often wondered sometimes just how much we know of people underneath. The story leaves a lot to the imagination. Well done, Loré.
Five out of five ratchet wrenches. 😉
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Thank you! I’ll take some WD40 with that. 😀
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Better than Metamucil.
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So sad. The world can be an unkind place
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Unfortunately so.
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Fantastic writing as always. I could use some wings 🙂
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We all could! Thank you!
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I love that she grew wings.
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I think we should all! 🙂
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Absolutely!
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This could a transformers back story. “a sad mixture of metal and blood” conveys so much. Nicely done.
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Thank you!
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A reflective tale for us to ponder. 🙂 You’ve done this really well.
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Thank you, Maria!
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Beautiful transformation, from pain and humiliation to strength and freedom. Very thought-provoking.
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Glad you find it so. Thank you.
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I love the darkness that is conveyed and the beautiful message it becomes. Nicely written! 🙂
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Thank you, really glad you liked it.https://widgets.wp.com/notificationsbeta/2439580440#
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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I worry when things are as bad as they are today, that they’ll just get worse in the future. Communication between parents and children seems to be breaking down. We also have to remember we are the examples for our children. I cringe when I see some of the adult behavior occurring these days. The words “love your neighbor” are being trampled under foot. Well done, Lore. —- Suzanne
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What a thoughtful comment, thank you Suzanne.
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