Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Melanie Greenwood
Your last words are echoing through my mind, descending upon my heart, overlapping my troubled soul.
“I love you, baby girl.”
I enter the cemetery, cold fist clenching half a dozen roses, drops of blood falling on a fresh blanket of snow. Calm, composed, frozen…statue in the making, I am fracturing from the inside, my words to you a painful memory.
“Take the next flight.”
Choking on a mouthful of regret, I recall our last goodbye at the departure gate.
“I love you, baby girl.” “I love you too, Dad.”
Your grave is dark and cold, mirroring my soul.
When I saw todays prompt, I decided to revisit one of my old FF stories. This one was originally written in July 2014, inspired by Rochelle’s photo of an airplane wing. You can read my original story here. I am surrounded by snow, so I feel it fits even more this time around.
Oh this is so sad… do we ever know when the last parting is going to be?… I just wonder if that casual remark said might be the last word, the testimony of our being.
Dear Loré,
I loved it then and I love it now. Sweet picture.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you! ❤
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Tragic. You did this so well. I loved the phrase ‘statue in the making’ – that was priceless Lore.
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So haunting. You are such a gifted writer.
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Lovely, sad, story. So many regrets
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Thank you, Claire!
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So sad, Loré. Very well written.
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Much appreciated, Dale.
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Oh this is so sad… do we ever know when the last parting is going to be?… I just wonder if that casual remark said might be the last word, the testimony of our being.
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I don’t know, really. I think we are remembered by our deads, as well as by our words.
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Very touching.
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Thank you so much.
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I loved it then and love it still! You’ve painted a very clear picture in my mind of this sad scene.
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That is so nice to know, thank you!
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Viscerally painful, Loré, and the photo is so dear.
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One of my favorite photos. Thank you, much appreciated, as ever.
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It’s such a wonderful photo! So sweet of both of you.
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This is so sad, and beautifully written. The line with the statue inside is perfect.
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So glad you liked it. Thank you!
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So moving in its brokenness.
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Thank you.
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So sad and well-written, Lore. This perfectly describes deep mourning. Well done. —- Suzanne
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Thank you, Suzanne. Glad you liked my second try.
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