Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Melanie Greenwood
“Your Highness, one word and we can stop this.”
” Your naivety is sweet, my Lord.”
“This parley was supposed to be a formality.”
“Did no one tell you that our parts were chosen long ago. Yesterday you sought a comfort in my bed, but love has no place on a battlefield.”
“A Stone Cold Queen – the name suits you.”
“Today I am not a queen, but a warrior. Although I may not live to see another day, I would suffer a thousand deaths for my people.”
“That is such a foolish reason to die.”
“Ah, but that is a good reason to be remembered.”
This is an excerpt from the story I am working on, right now it is all over the place and mostly in my head, but I still hope it will break free one of these days.
The final line reminds me of the wisdom of Havamal:
Cattle die, kinsmen die; the self must also die. I know one thing which never dies: the reputation of each dead man… (but it sounds so much better in Icelandic)
I think considering the legacy we leave should be a concern for more people.
Wisdom of one may be a tragedy of many. There is a difference between the dreams of kings and peasants, but who is to say which dreams are bigger and more important?
Thank you, your comment perfectly accompanies my story.
All of the stories we carry in our heads break free eventually. I wonder how many heroes share the belief that dieing for the sake of others is “A good reason to be remembered”.
I don’t think true heroes think about that. In this instance she was not thinking about the glory, but faced with imminent despair, just countered his statement, trying to make some kind of sense out of the pointlessness of war. Oh my, seems I’ll tel entire story through these comments. 😀 Thank you so much for your observation and your time.
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
The final line reminds me of the wisdom of Havamal:
Cattle die, kinsmen die; the self must also die. I know one thing which never dies: the reputation of each dead man… (but it sounds so much better in Icelandic)
I think considering the legacy we leave should be a concern for more people.
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Wisdom of one may be a tragedy of many. There is a difference between the dreams of kings and peasants, but who is to say which dreams are bigger and more important?
Thank you, your comment perfectly accompanies my story.
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intriguing story. very easy to visualize and i’m not saying that cuz Games of Thrones will be upon us soon:)
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Oh, I am a sucker for epic stories. It is comforting to see I am not alone, thank you.
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Good luck with it. I would love to read more.
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Thank you, I am gonna need it.
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That’s a very profound thought. Good luck with your venture.
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Thank you, Sandra.
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I hope her adviser/lover mans up and arms himself.
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Actually, he is not her adviser, but her enemy. The lover part is true, though.
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Best of luck with the rest of the story, this extract is certainly intriguing.
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Thank you, I am happy you find it intriguing. Since I left the dialog standing alone, it does read a little bit clumpy.
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I wouldn’t say that. Stand alone dialogue can be a great read if done right and I think you’ve managed that.
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Thank you so much.
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A lovely excerpt and I would like to read more. See… you need to write it. 🙂
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Oh, I brought this all on my own. 🙂 But it is in there somewhere, I promise. 🙂 Thank you.
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Dear Loré,
An intriguing story in the making. Keep her going.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Hopefully, I’ll manage to do that. Thank you, Rochelle.
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Great excerpt, I especially like the last couple of lines.
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Thank you, that means a lot.
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Intriguing Lore!!
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Thank you, Cybele.
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All of the stories we carry in our heads break free eventually. I wonder how many heroes share the belief that dieing for the sake of others is “A good reason to be remembered”.
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I don’t think true heroes think about that. In this instance she was not thinking about the glory, but faced with imminent despair, just countered his statement, trying to make some kind of sense out of the pointlessness of war. Oh my, seems I’ll tel entire story through these comments. 😀 Thank you so much for your observation and your time.
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Would love to read more!! I hope you’ll post more parts when you get it all going 🙂
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Thank you, Rachel. I hope I’ll do just that.
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Nice teaser. I’m interested. I want to read more!
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Thank you, I’ll give my best.
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Dear Snow, So, she has a lover who is also her nemesis. Very interesting story – good job! Nan 🙂
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Thank you, Nan. She is a very complex person…at least in my mind. 🙂
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