Over at dVerse Brian challenged us to break a form of poetry. This is what I would call a broken acrostic, where the last letter of each line spells out a title of my poem. Hope you enjoy my little exercise in breaking.
In the end it wont matteR
How we lose our lovE
Once we leave this asyluM
Do not dare to cry for mE
Through my words you’ll swiM
Over my stanzas you will climB
You’ll want me as your heroinE
But I always was your annihilatoR
Isn’t this life one crazy dilemmA
I find it impossible to fight addictioN
Although your touch leaves me toxiC
And still I thought you’d never break mE
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
Irrespective of the form, what you’ve written here tells of a dark, intense, dangerous relationship. To do so and to produce simoultaneously a line-end acrostic shows great skill. Bravo!
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Thank you, much appreciated!
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heh…have you ever seen a double acrostic…where the first and last letters spell the word….my that would be frustrating….whew…sound slike an intense relationship…both a bit toxic to each other…luckily it wont matter when we leave this world, but still…yikes.
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Oh my, double acrostic. Now, that would be a challenge….and now I need to try it. 😛
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To me it also felt like the persona is reflecting on a toxic relationship. Interesting twist of the form!
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I adore acrostic form, because it really pushes me to buid a structure. And this reverse acrostic was even more challenging. Glad you liked it.
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I really like your reverse acrostic. Yes the relationship has the odd quirk, but that’s how life is.
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Thank you, glad you liked it.
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Nothing broken about this acrostic! It is a wonderful different take. The end acrostic shows much talent and skill, the words give us a picture of a dangerous relationship, but still…..poignant. I like ths muchly.
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It was a little bit tricky at the start, but then it all the words came together. Thank you for you kind words.
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I love the your presentation of the end line acrostic form ~ I have never tried it this way ~ Also the subject matter is very dark & telling of a toxic relationship ~ Well done with the challenge ~
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Thank you so much. It was a first for me, too. 🙂
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I like it right acrostic – quite the “forget-me-not” modern, clever, and appealing. You really changed it up!
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Well, I just can’t resist a good challenge. Thank you!
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I really think this is amazing! craft such a strong tale AND the acrostic form is TOP.
You’ll want me as your heroine
But I always was your annihilator — brilliant :)))
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Oh, thank you so much. I am so happy that I found a place where I can share my poetry.
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This is excellent. Really I don’t think I have ever read an acrostic where the last letters in a line are used. I like the intensity in your poem as well! Bravo.
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Thank you, Mary. It was tricky to combine the structure and the emotion.
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I love acrostics but have never tried an end line – difficult for sure. I like to take a short quote and write each line beginning with the words rather than letters… for example https://debispoems.wordpress.com/2015/01/12/poetry-is/
Well done. I’m impressed.
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Thank you, much appreciated. And I love what you did with your poem, might try that form someday.
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Wow, this is wonderful. How clever of you! Another ‘new’ form I must try for myself some time soon.
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Thank you, it’s always fun to try something new.
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oh heck… that hits hard… fighting addiction is never easy and if it’s addiction to a person it can be double difficult – i once was in a relationship like that a bit and it was a way through many valleys and the most breathtaking mountain tops as well
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Thank you, Claudia. Good to see you on the other side of the mountains.
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Oh this is dark Loré, somehow there are relationships that are destructive for both, the comparison to addiction is too credible to me. The form and the selection of word for the acrostic is really good.
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Thank you, Björn. When I started, it looked almost impossible. But after few minutes, I fell into the rhythm and it all came together nicely. I am a big fun of acrostic, so this was a pleasant.challenge.
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Dark, taut and very disciplined poem. You make me want to try this – and a double acrostic! Now that would be the challenge to beat all challenges!
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Yes, I am intrigued by double acrostic, now that Brian mentioned it. I will go for it, I am sure. Thank you so much!
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I love acrostic forms, and you’ve done this very well indeed.
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Thank you, much appreciated!
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I chose to “break” an acrostic too, but we both found unique ways to do so. Great piece!
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Thank you, Bryan.
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