Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Georgia Koch
Copyright – Georgia Koch
This is one time it’s OK not to be able to pay the ferryman. I loved this, and the contrast between the vernacular and the more classical language. 🙂 Well done. Great take on the prompt.
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I find the ferryman too serious and boring, wanted to add a touch of humanity to this tired, old deity. I was hesitant about that last line, but then I sad: “Ah, f…..” 😛 Glad you liked it.
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Hahaha! Love the surprise twist at the end – which I should have expected, given the fun twists you always bring to ABF! What fun 🙂
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Oh, good thing you didn’t read my other stories. I might come across as bipolar, cause most of my stories and poems are depresingly dark. Glad you liked this one!
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I cant believe I haven’t read any before, Loré! My bad. Your a woman of many talents 🙂
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Thank you, I am blushing. 😛
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Wonderful take on the prompt. No coin, no problem.
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I would hope innocence would find the way to prevail, even in the darkest places. Thank you for that wonderful “wonderful”. 🙂
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A father’s sin should never rest hard upon the shoulder of his son, not to walk penniless on the shores of Styx.. The moral in this is flawless.
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Sins of our fathers…following us like a shadow. Thank you for your kind words.
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Brilliant dialogue.
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Thank you! Brilliant – I like that.
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A ferryman with a heart, how tough that must be for him! I loved this one, very well done 🙂
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Imagine the curse, to dwell in darkness with a heavy load on his heart. Thank you.
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great job on conversation… your characters were so real
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I was aiming for that, so thank you.
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Nice update and modernization of the old Greek legend. I’m not sure if he got across or not without the coin but I’m guessing when Charon said “fuck it!” he did. Or maybe not.
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Who knows what that old grumpy dude thinks? Thank you!
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Dear Loré,
Interesting blend of myth and modern dialogue.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I felt that last line would polarize people, not many profanities in this FF community. Thank you for being kind. 🙂
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Dear Lore,
Sometimes you just have to say it.
A good story for the prompt and well written to boot.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you, Doug. It is very interesting to see people’s reactions to the story. Some find it funny, some find it tragic and I suspect some are little bit bothered by my choice of words.
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Perfect story to go along with the photo … loved every word! Ciao, Georgia!
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It is so nice to see One Four Challenge photo as a FF prompt. Somehow I missed this vesion and I really like it. Thank you, Georgia.
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I agree, I was very happy to see the photo up for the prompt! This version was WK 1 … but it’s really very similar to WK 3 … a little grungier perhaps. Glad you recognized it!
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I thought the really green image was Week 1, well it was two months ago, who could blame me? 😛 I like how many of my WP colleagues run in the same circles with me.
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Yes … that is really interesting. … the acid green image was week 2 … trying to get rid of the acid green I came up with Charon’s boat … and yes … that was an age ago!
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That last line made me laugh, just the juxtaposition with mythology. I think being Charon’s apprentice would be creepy, but he’d probably have some stories to tell later.
-David
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I thought it strangely fitting to end on that note. We take all the history and mythology too serious, while all these demi-gods wood probably sound less almighty in RL. Thank you!
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I loved the rather old-fashioned pompous speech of the ferryman as he explains that it’s okay the chap can’t pay him, then that last line, almost as if he’s weary of such speech but felt that he had to say it and now it’s out of the way he can get on with things.
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You got it spot on. With that last line I wanted to accentuate that over the top language that is often used when writing about history. I bet nobody really spoke like that. Thank you!
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Yes I enjoyed the language as well.
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Glad to hear that, it was a risk I was happy to take.
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Very nice. I llike the way the dialogue brings them to life.
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Thank you, Margaret. Nice to hear it worked.
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I guess they hadn’t met before and are unlikely to meet again. No profit for either.
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Maybe there lies their profit?
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The boatman’s mercy. I wonder what he sees in her and who she will become. Now that would make for an interesting read.
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Yes, it would. Now if only someone got the time and write the story. Thank you.
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Great use of dialogue to tell the story. I look the fresh look at Charon. 🙂
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Thank you!
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Sharp clever dialogue and story-telling. I love the humor in the boatman’s mercy. A nicely balanced and well-written story.
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Thank you , Dawn.
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Looks like a few of us saw the same boatman in our offering this week. Interesting way to end it but it works.
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I suspected there would be few stories with the same subject. Glad you liked it.
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Dear Snow, Good story and dialogue! Nan 🙂
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Masterful dialog. Nice work.
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Thank you.
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