My fellow Friday Fictioneer Björn Rudberg commented on my FF short story, how it fits perfectly to the prompt that’s up on dVerse. To write about a secret, without actually revealing them. So, I decided to revisit the story and try to transform it into a poem. I’ll let you, my dear readers, to be the judges on how successful I was.
Like a whirling dervish,
I futilely try to fill this emptiness.
It was always my favorite place,
this secluded courtyard, our secret garden.
Quiet little corner,
where we used to talk…
where we used to dance
our perfect routine, our whimsical relationship.
These days other people
dine at our table,
sharing stories, wine and laughs…
But I never let them go out to the courtyard.
And when they leave,
I walk out and dance.
Pretending you are here.
Practising my carefully choreographed therapy.
I spin on my tip toes,
forgetting the world,
remembering us.
One day I’ll admit the truth….Just not today.
Thank you Björn, for opening the doors for me, I hope my poems will find a warm place here.
Right off the bat, you have found a warm place with me because we share the same love of poetry AND the same WordPress theme! I like how you spin poems from your life.
oh heck.. it is sad when the loved one isn’t there any more to share the things that they once did together…. and sometimes we just need time to work through things before we’re able to move on
oh quite a heartbreaking secret…so easy to live in that denial than accept the finility of that broken relationship…
i found your comment and fixed your link for you…smiles.
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Oh, thank you so much! Both for your lovely words and for your help. Could you tell me what I did wrong, so I can do it correctly next time?
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Right off the bat, you have found a warm place with me because we share the same love of poetry AND the same WordPress theme! I like how you spin poems from your life.
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I feel in love with this WP theme from the start and it really suits me well.
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Oh that ‘dance’ gets me every time.
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Glad you liked it, much appreciated.
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Ah – this work perfectly.. What a great way to work it into a poem,
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Thank you, it’s all because of you. 😀
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Perhaps love never leaves when danced alonG..:)
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What a lovely thought. Thank you.
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What a beautiful poem – now I must go and read the story. But you do capture that mood of longing and a gorgeous flower in the secret garden!
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Thank you, my muse was running wild yesterday. 🙂
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Wonderful photo!
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Thank you!
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oh heck.. it is sad when the loved one isn’t there any more to share the things that they once did together…. and sometimes we just need time to work through things before we’re able to move on
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Thank you, Claudia. It is true, that old sayin about time.
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“One day I’ll admit the truth….Just not today.” I so love the effect, smiles – thank you for joining my prompt.
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
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