Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….


 Copyright –  Douglas M. MacIlroy

I know my thrashing excites you, makes you want me more. Your sweet voice sings a poisonous lullaby and I am paralyzed.

every breath you take
every move you make
every step you take
I’ll be devouring you

What a stupid mistake,  leaving me stuck in this perfectly designed hell, watching you watching me. You’ve entangled me in your web of lies, my desperation making your grip ever stronger.

oh can’t you see
you belong to me
these bonds you’ll never break
no matter how many steps you take

Kill me. Release me. One way or another, I am dead.

Special “Thank you” to Marie Gail for helping me take a peek outside  my little box.


39 thoughts on “Battlefield

    • The fact that you love this means so much, so thank you for that. I was actually writing about the beasts, but once again it works as a metaphor for human behavior. I really hope Rochelle posts a happy photo soon, I am actually a very funny person in RL. 😀


  1. Lore,
    Interesting reflections on a theme. I’ve always loved the Police song that you weave through this prose poem. Your thoughts mirror the disturbing yet fascinating undertones.
    All my best,
    Marie Gail


  2. Dear Lore,

    I did not once see beast, but humans caught in the tangled webs of relationships they weave. I love this tale you’ve told and think that the incorporation of the song and the changes to the lyrics was excellent. If you’ve stepped outside of your comfort zone or norm, it doesn’t show. Keep it up. Wander far afield. You’re good at it.




    • Thank you, Doug. I don’t know if I have a comfort zone, because the language of the story is not far removed from my usual stuff. It’s more about the form, the layout, I enjoyed delivering something visually different. But I do intend to wander, thank you for the encouragement.


  3. Such a vicious interchange. The destructiveness of this relationship is clear – and if they’re not people but just bugs, it’s almost as sinister. Very compelling writing.


  4. I struggled to picture this properly in my head, mainly because as soon as I hit that first bit of verse, I couldn’t get the song out of my head. I suspect this will now circulate in my head all day now!


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