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Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….

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 Copyright –  Janet Webb

There is a price to be paid when you fall for the illusion that the grass is greener on the other side. A casual glance, a not so casual touch, a foolishly insignificant affair…
Rose left her husband one late summer afternoon, seeking her long gone youth between her gardener’s thighs. Four months later, with both her wallet and her heart broken, the walls of a cheap hotel room started closing in.
“The winter is coming.” she said.
“Come home.” her husband said.
Once beautiful, now withered, the flowers were still there.
She said: “I don’t deserve you.”
He said: “It’s Christmas.”

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38 thoughts on “Home

  1. Dear Loré,

    She’d be a fool not to go back to her husband. I think, at some time or another, we all look back and wonder what happened to youth. Some make tragic mistakes.

    Beautifully written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. Lovely story, though I don’t think she should go back. I suspect she will never feel good about herself within the marriage. Well done for writing a story that provokes many different responses

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  3. Dear Lore, He did say “It’s Christmas” so I hope she goes home. There is a lot of sadness in this story and thank God everyone doesn’t act on a whim. Good job! Nan 🙂

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  4. She was foolish and impulsive,wasn’t she? I’m glad they reconciled. She did her penance in the hotel room and realises her error. You’ve shown the complexity of her feelings well here.

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  5. Dear Lore,

    Your story illustrates, from a woman’s POV, what I hear far more often from the men’s POV. It was interesting to note that your male character asked his wife to come home. Interesting in that you, the author put those words into a male’s mind and had them issuing from his mouth. At the very least, you made men look a little better than they usually do.

    There was deep feeling and shallow desires, self realization and the Damocles’ Sword of consequences despite her being asked to return home. An open ended story, as is all of life, whether we wish to acknowledge it or not. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • Every time I read your comments, I feel very proud that you connected with my stories. I think that is the greatest compliment someone can give me.
      In my core I am a feminist, equal rights and opportunities for all. That’s why I like to challenge the stereotypes, to try and look the world from all perspectives. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn’t, but at least I try.
      Thank you for recognizing that.

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