Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….
Copyright – Jean L. Hays
– You must be joking! Is this it?
– What? You thought it would be bigger?
– Yes. I can’t believe I drove six hours for this piece of junk.
– So, you don’t want it?
– Of course I want it. Why? You want it for yourself?
– Well, I took care of him for the last few years. He wanted me to have it.
– Do you have it in writing? Did he leave a will?
– Come on, brother. Are we going down that road?
– I don’t care. The law is the law. Half of it is mine.
– You were always such a jerk.
– Screw you.
Dear Loré,
Yep. Sounds like two brothers. Spot on dialogue. I hope they can work things out. BTW. Although the name Edsel has become synonymous with failure, that car would be worth a fortune today. Funny how things work out, isn’t it?
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Unfortunately, my inspiration came from real events involving someone I know. Fortunately, not the case with me. As someone who recently lost most of my family, I must say we settled the inheritance issue calmly and happily, which seems to be a rare situation.
Thank you, Rochelle.
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So sorry for your loss, Loré. But, as I’ve said, grist for the mill. There’s catharsis in that.
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Great story and great accompanying song 🙂
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Thank you, I thought the song would fit with the story.
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Now that sounds like a familial (and I mean familial not familiar) conversation. 🙂 Great dialogue.
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Here’s to old sayings and annoying family members. :)Thank you, Sandra.
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Just those few lines, knowing that one brother only wants it because the other brother also wants it, even though they both know it’s junk, is perfect. Just perfect.
Claire
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Oh, thank you Claire. I try to explore different ways and styles of writing as often as possible.
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Sometimes I’m glad I only had sisters 🙂
I like a dialogue only story, really brings the nature of characters out. Great capturing of the relationship in only 100 words too.
Cheers
KT
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Thank you, much appreciated.
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Dear Lore,
You nailed the dialog and the tension between the brothers. Why humans must fight over trifles is beyond me. There is something very reptilian about it all. Great piece of work from a difficult prompt.
Aloha,
Doug
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It’s interesting how some of you concluded this was a tale of two brothers, although I refered only to one character as a “brother”. Thank you, Doug. Always a joy to read your comment.
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Neat tale, well written.
AnElephant enjoys this,
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Happy to make AnElephant happy.
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so sad when material things come between family members….nice story though
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True, it is sad and it happens too often. Tnx for stopping by.
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The dialogue is terrific. I can imagine the fistacuffs that ensued.
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Thank you, I hope it never comes to that.
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Lore, I agree this is terrific dialogue, very realistic. These squabbles over property are terrible. I’ve seen it first hand. No one in my family had a problem, but I’ve seen it. I sympathize with you on the loss of your family members. Well written. — Susan
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Thank you so much, Susan. That is one awful situation, fighting over stupid things.
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There is nothing worse than a fallout among siblings over inheritance.. it takes years out of a good life in peace.. (yes I have seen that happen too)
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I agree with you. I feel very lucky my family managed to go through all that with much grace and love.
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I can understand brothers falling out over a piece of junk. We’re soft, sentimental fools.
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Hahaha, thank you for the laughs.
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Very real. Too bad they can’t just cut the dang thing in half. Good dialogue, this.
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I’ve seen people fight over so many stupid things, how sad to waste your life on that. Thank you for stopping by.
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Reminds me of when my father passed away. Not good memories.
DJ
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I am so sorry to heart that you had to deal not only with sadness, but with something like this too.
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Great dialogue! I love how it can tell so much about their personalities and drivers in life. What a shame some brothers have to be so greedy!
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Thank you, Jessie. Sometimes we make choices we regret, but it’s even worse when we don’t regret our mistakes.
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Ah…. family….
Great one!
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Exactly! Well said. Thank you.
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Great turnaround.. Could not but have the same thoughts myself
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Thank you.
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Cool dialogue! I can’t help thinking that they should be arguing that the other brother should get it, though 🙂
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I think they shouldn’t argue at all. Thank you for your continuous support.
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You nailed it on that dialogue. I gotta admit, too, that song is an appropriate coda to the story, too.
Loré, you did super! People need to calm the ^&%* down!
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Couldn’t agree more. So sad to argue about stupid things after someone dies, makes you wonder what kind of life they had…when in the end all that matters is love. My mom was always smothering me with her love, calling me her little sunshine and now that she is gone, those are the memories I value the most.
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Arghh!! Imagine arguing over that!! Great point Lore!!
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Thnak you, Cybele. It would be souch a sad thing to vaise your life on.
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PS: great song!
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Great dialogue. You really show the conflict and jealousy between these two characters.
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Thank you, your words are much appreciated.
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So sad when brothers fight. I never really understand that.
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Me neither, I would rather walk away than have my heart broken in that manner.
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Dear Loré, This is a great story – I love it and have seen disagreements upon the passing of relatives. I remember my mother begging us not to fight or get mad over “things” when she died – and well, we didn’t. Good job! Nan 🙂
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Thank you, Nan. Glad to hear you listened to your mom’s wise words.
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