Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, here we go….
Copyright – Renee Heath
There was a pattern to their lovemaking, but she chose to ignore it. Sometimes he would bend her over the table and took whatever he wanted from her willing body. Other times he would take her to bed and use her achingly slow, breaking her more with every gentle thrust. She never could decide which way she preferred more.
How easily we bend and break, she thought, as he moved in and out of her in a leisurely pace. When he locked his burning eyes with hers and whispered breathlessly: “I love you.” she whispered back: “I am leaving you.”
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
Sometimes in a slow burn, the embers die lacking oxygen…
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And we take too long to break out of it.
Thank you for stopping by.
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Dear Loré,
Interesting and sensual take on the prompt.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you.
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OMG – I was totally banged in the last line … amazing and so realistic !
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Thank you so much, I am glad you liked it.
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instead of ”trust” you might mean ”thrust”, not sure. Superb ending. excellent description. True writing.
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Thank you for the correction and for your kind words.
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This is great writing, Loré. I confess my first thought was, she has terrible timing for a break-up. So, what does he do then, keep going or stop? 🙂
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I thought about it too. 🙂 She is risking so much, but I guess she reached her breaking point.
Thank you.
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Patterns can become so monotonous after a while …
Well written, in particular the last line
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Thank you!
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Lore this was such an interesting take on the prompt, so well written and very enjoyable. Well done
Dee
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Thank you so much. I am still new in exposing my work to the world, so every word means a lot, especially a kind one. 🙂
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Lore, Very descriptive piece. She apparently refuses to be controlled in this or any other way. Well written. 🙂
Susan
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We can bend one too many times, but in the end we reach that breaking point. Thank you for your kind words.
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Decisions, decisions – Oops, mind made up. The end beat was delightfully unexpected.
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Thank you, it is somewhere in between courageous and foolish.
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I’ll bet that well and truly put him off his stroke. 🙂 Nicely done.
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I would think so, Sandra. If not, there’s definitely a problem. Although perhaps it’s the dreaded erection that last for more than for hours, courtesy of Viagra or one of those other “wonder drugs” we’re bombarded with constantly. I’ve always wondered how you discreetly get to the hospital.
janet
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Discreet and erection hand in hand…pun intended. 🙂 Ladies, you are cracking me up, thank you for your lovely comments.
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I’m not trying to be salacious with that observation but I’m thinking a box held in front or an open briefcase. Seriously, it would be difficult to do!
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The story was very well done – captivating!!! I must admit, I’m also enjoying the comments 🙂
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Thank you, I am glad you find both enjoyable. 🙂
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Still shaking my head and laughing at the same time over that final line. She definitely got him out of the mood over that one, I’m sure. Good story.
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Thank you.
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I knew there was a catch. Well done.
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Tnx, glad you liked it.
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Steamy stuff! With an unexpected climax 😉 (especially for him!)
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Thank you.
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Erotic! After her declaration, he either had to pick up his “leisurely pace” to get it over with, or he flat-lined. It could go either way. Well done!
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Yes, it could go in many different directions. Thank you.
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Oh, I like this sensual take! Great writing.
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Kick ass, erotic writing here! I liked the pacing, the sensual tones and the straightforward, well written story telling. Excellent!
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So happy you liked it! Thank you.
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The punch in the end takes it home. Well done. Cheers! 🙂
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.
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Wow! This one took my breath away! I’m glad that she finally realized she deserved better. She sure chose an interesting time to break the news. Powerful, nonetheless.
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Thank you so much for your kind words!
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I was captivated by your story. Sensual and sad.
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Thank you, I am so glad you liked it.
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