Another Wednesday, another Friday Fictioneers. The challenge is to write 100 words story that has a beginning, middle and end, inspired by the photo posted on Miss Rochelle’s blog. So, here it goes…
My latest attempt draws an inspiration from the works of one of my favorite authors, Jules Verne and combines characters from his two books – The Children of Captain Grant (Les Enfants du capitaine Grant, 1867-1868) and Twenty Thousand Leagues Under the Sea (Vingt mille lieues sous les mers, 1870.)
Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy
“Are you Mary and Robert Grant?”, a strange, muffled voice came from the giant towering above them.
Robert shrieked, trying to take cover behind his younger sister.
Peeking under the pillows, Mary said: “Yes, we are. How do you know our names?” sounding more confident than she actually felt and continued to fire questions: ” What do you want from us? Just so you know, I am not afraid of you.”
Captain Nemo removed the helmet and asked: “What do you know about Atlantis? Your father said you would help.”
Mary winked at Robert : “You’re up for a quest?”
After two rather serious stories, I was ready to have some fun. Oh, how I wish to be a part of some secret adventure/quest in some faraway place.
Snow's Fissures and Fractures 
Sounds like the beginning of an epic adventure.
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Thank you for stopping by.
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Great spirit of childish adventure here, this could be the opening scene of a Narnia-style children’s book. I must admit, I don’t know The Children of Captain Grant, and read 20,000 Leagues a LONG time ago.
Couple of minor points – “tried to cover behind”, do you mean “tried to TAKE cover behind”?
and “continued to fire questions” is a bit odd since her previous statement wasn’t a question.
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Thank you for pointing out these errors. I really took my time with this one, and read it over and over again. 🙂 I moved one sentence from one place to another, thus the confusion with “continued to fire questions”. Unfortunately, I have no one to proofread, so I’ll just have to be more careful. As they say – never a failure, always a lesson.
Again, thank you.
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Absolutely not a failure – I thought the tone and spirit of the piece was great. I’ve vowed always to point out hiccoughs when I find them in other people’s writing, because I appreciate it when people do that for me. Like you, I have nobody except myself to proofread before I post, so I like getting honest feedback from my online friends!
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Reminds me of the children’s books I used to love reading, and the sad realization things like this don’t happen in real life.
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I agree, children’s books always seem so fun. But I suspect I would be shrieking, just like Robert. 🙂
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You did well moving sentences and adding tension. All I can say is GO MARY! Her brother is not so very brave.
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Girl power! Thank you for your comment.
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I’m a big fan of good children’s and young adult books and this sounds like the beginning of a ripping good tale. Hurrah for adventure!
janet
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Thnak you!
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I get a strong sense of your adventurous spirit coming out in Mary. Go Girls!
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Thank you!
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Dear Loré,
Sounds like the kids are about to embark on a great adventure. I like the direction you took. Good use of the prompt.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I appreciate your comment, thank you!
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Adventure, ON!
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Yes, we all need a little bit of adventure in our lives. 🙂
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I am – I am – always up for a quest! So when do we start? 😀
Great take !!
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Yesterday? It’s never too early for a quest. 🙂 Thank you.
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🙂 am on !
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I agree that this is a good story and a good beginning for a longer story. We’re all still learning. I’m also the only one to proofread my material. Well done. 🙂
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Thank you. I was in a mood for a lighter story this week, and although this really seams just like a beginning of the novel, I am happy with how it turned out. We can’t always be serious.
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hmpff. what a brave brother. go, sis, go! well done.
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Thank you. I think it had more to do with her age than gender. Kids can be so brave. Once we grow up, we tend to look at things more seriously.
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Sounds like the start of a rip-roaring novel of adventure and discovery!
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Yes, the world is definitely their oyster. Thank you for reading my story.
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Nice job! 🙂
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Thank you!
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Nice fanciful story! I want to be 8 and have you read it to me …
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Ah, to be kid again! Tnx.
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I am all set for the quest 🙂 Nice, light, spirit-lifting story!
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Thank you, glad you liked it!
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A kid with a wide streak of courage. Well done.
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Thank you!
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Loved this take. Mary’s bravado and the wonder of children. This is exactly the sort of adventure I’d have wanted to embark on as a girl…..wait I still do. Shall we head for Atlantis?
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I say, we must! Thank you. 🙂
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nice story. I felt it in my bones.
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Thank you!
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I always love a great adventure, and it sounds like Captain Nemo has a lot in store for these youngsters. This was very intriguing and could, no doubt, be expanded into a wildly exciting (and longer) story. Great work!
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Thank you, I am happy you liked it!
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Dear Snow – I don’t know which one of these stories I would vote for as my favorite this week, but this is so full of magic and a child’s imagination – it’s pushing the top! Love it, love it! When you write the book, I want it! Such a good writer! Nan 🙂
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Oh my, thank you very much! Such a lovely compliment. ♥
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What a cool story! It came alive for me.
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Thank you!
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It’s such an imaginative kids’ story
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Thank you.
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